Space between you and me

The space between us

Marked with fireworks and icy expanses

The space between us

Filled with tears and laughter

The space between us

Filled with those happy merry-go-rounds and sad ‘Hold Me’s

The space between us

Is dotted with those million moments where we knew we belong

Oh! The space between us

Is filled with YOU and with ME

And with everything we have and we dream of

We hope for, ask for, and build up together

Oh! The space between us

Is OUR space!

– Pritesh

(PS: One of those rare times when I feel romantic! :D)

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6 Comments

  1. Sujit Kumar Chakrabarti said,

    August 13, 2007 at 9:47 am

    Not my area of expertise, for sure. This romance-giri! 😉
    Good nevertheless. (Non-expert’s feedback)

  2. SHAMIT said,

    August 13, 2007 at 5:17 pm

    That is a pretty complex piece of poetry. Very well written! Some places it seems its placed in the past sometimes in the present. Liked it …

  3. Vinod Kumar B G said,

    August 13, 2007 at 5:58 pm

    Hmmmmm…..
    Nice one… The space b/n me and cute _____ 😉

    I am expecting some comments from our Ananth 😉

  4. Pritesh said,

    August 13, 2007 at 11:18 pm

    Sujit, you don’t have to burn your hand to know that fire IS there! 😀 So, relax about being ‘inexperienced’! 🙂

    Thanks Shamit for your comment. I suppose it is partially about present and partially about past…..

    And Vinoda, Ananth usually writes pretty lousy comments only! So, it’s ok! 😀

  5. Bhargavi said,

    August 17, 2007 at 10:41 pm

    Rather short and abrupt. Dont think the poem conveyed wat was meant, dont think it did justice to the emotion behind the work.
    It starts off on a strong note, but somehow becomes weak towards the end.. dint like it!

  6. Pritesh said,

    August 19, 2007 at 12:21 pm

    Yeah, I suppose. I have deliberately tried not to change the content or even refine it. I wrote it as it came to my mind. Completely impromptu. But thanks Bhargavi anyway! Criticism is a great stepping stone to improving…..


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